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I had asked someone to write a press release for me and they wrote 2. I would love some feedback before sending them out

 

Option 1

 

How many small businesses do you think would like to save over $16,000 a year?

In today’s high tech market this option has now become a feasible reality. How?

Simply put – by making the shift from a full-time employee to a part-time Virtual Assistant.

A Virtual Assistant (VA) is a highly-trained independent entrepreneur who provides a

myriad of business support services virtually via phone, fax and internet based

technology to support and meet the growing needs of businesses worldwide.

With the number of work-from-home VA’s rising nation wide, it is important to

differentiate between the many options.

 

Meet Catherine Reay, founder and owner of Reay Solutions:

Catherine Reay left her job as Director of Human Resources and Risk Management

after entering motherhood. However, she never stopped working in the field of Human

Resources. Catherine launched Reay Solutions specializing in administrative, human

resources and project management support. She started Reay Solutions to assist small

business owners, entrepreneurs, and work-at-home professionals with the support needed

to reach their business goals.

Here are just a few of the services that Reay Solutions can provide: Candidate

Research and Screenings, Schedule Management, Reference Verification, Project

Management, Preparation of Performance Evaluations, Consultation Services, Email

Management, Appointment Setting and Reminder Services, Report Typing, Event

Planning and more.

 

According to the Virtual Assistant Networking Association (VANA) a full-time

employee would typically run an annual cost of $76,960. By switching to the services of

a part-time VA, a business can estimate an annual payout closer to $16,800*, a savings of

more than sixty thousand dollars.

While some small business costs can be eliminated or downsized, there is no need to

sacrifice the services of a professional support system.

Catherine Reay is available to meet those business needs with her flexible schedule,

payment plans and numerous support options.

Catherine is quickly pleasing her clients, satisfied by a job well done:

 

Working with Cathy has been great! She has patiently assisted me with so many

tasks from email management and appointment setting to recruitment of

additional staff. She has been not only a exceptional virtual project manager but

an asset to my company! She is timely, efficient and professional

Joe Coppola,

Owner

Sports Integrity

To reach Reay Solutions please contact Catherine at info@reaysolutions.com.

Reay Solutions

Virtual Solutions to Your Business Needs

##############

*Rates will vary depending on number of hours worked

 

Option 2 (waiting on a quote)

While the United States is currently experiencing a recession, to the dissolution of many

in-country jobs, small business continues to thrive. We have witnessed this same scenario

in years past – the larger corporations closing their doors during times of financial

crumble while the little guys stay afloat for varying reasons: lower overhead, a tighter

support network, the ability to work on trade and the freedom to cut costs as they deem

necessary.

In our current financial crunch, there now circulates one more way in which small

businesses can continue to succeed by utilizing an innovative ‘replacement’ support

system: a Virtual Assistant.

A Virtual Assistant (VA) is a highly-trained independent entrepreneur who provides a

myriad of business support services virtually via phone, fax and internet based

technology to support and meet the growing needs of businesses worldwide.

With the number of work-from-home VA’s rising nation wide, it is important to

differentiate between the many options.

Meet Catherine Reay, founder and owner of Reay Solutions:

Catherine Reay left her job as Director of Human Resources and Risk Management

after entering motherhood. However, she never stopped working in the field of Human

Resources. Catherine launched Reay Solutions specializing in administrative, human

resources and project management support. She started Reay Solutions to assist small

business owners, entrepreneurs, and work-at-home professionals with the support needed

to reach their business goals.

According to the Virtual Assistant Networking Association (VANA) a full-time

employee would typically run an annual cost of $76,960. By switching to the services of

a part-time VA, a business can estimate an annual payout closer to $16,800*, a savings of

more than sixty thousand dollars.

The demands of small business remain, during and after a recession. While some small

business costs can be eliminated or downsized, there is no need to sacrifice the services

of a professional support system.

Catherine Reay is available to meet those business needs with her flexible schedule,

payment plans and numerous support options.

The clients of Reay Solutions are happy to be saving money and cutting costs where they

can. One such client commented:

XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

Does your small business need affordable help? Why not consider Reay Solutions?

Reay Solutions

Virtual Solutions to Your Business Needs

##############

*Rates will vary depending on number of hours worked

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I like the 1st one much better. The 2nd starts with bad news and haven't we had enough of that - i didn't want to read the whole thing. The 1st starts out with you as a solution.

 

Good luck!!!

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I agree - definitely Option 1. You probably haven't finished proofreading but I noticed a couple of little bits to help you -

 

With the number of work-from-home VA’s

Should read VAs (ie, more than one).

 

She has been not only a exceptional virtual project manager

Should read "not only an exceptional"

 

It sounds really professional, good luck.

 

Gillian

 

 

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In the second one, the first paragraph is what people want to hear. They want to hear the economy is bleak. If they didn't, then it wouldn't be on the news every day.

 

I do like the first one because it starts with how businesses can save money, which people also want to hear.

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